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Review:Lululuna says:
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I love this! Narcissa really interests me as a character and you've brought her to life beautifully. The tensions of the Blacks and being part of this elite pureblood culture is really interesting: I liked how though Cissy's mum tries to be sweet with her, the daughter treats her stiffly, hinting that they're not used to sharing affection.

I like how Narcissa not only "is" a certain way, but tries to "appear" approapriately. For example, when she composes herself to appear as haughty and superior as possible to Lucius. It's like she has to construct the kind of person she's expected to appear as.

It's interesting that her marriage with Lucius was arranged by her parents. Very archaic, but I guess these are blood fanatics we're talking about. I felt like in the third memory, there was a hint that Cissy and Lucius have secretly been more than friends for a while, however. :P

I love how there's such a concentration on how they appear to the public world, and how this makes the private moments Narcissa has with her husband and son all the more precious.

I think this fragmented writing style worked very well for this one-shot. My only suggestion is that I would have liked to read more about the ordinary moments in their relationship, the little everyday expressions of love, but I can see you've got many other stories about Narcissa so maybe I'll just have to check those out! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you liked it, and think that I brought Narcissa to life. It is high praise for me, thank you. Yes, I always imagined all these pureblood families to only have a superficial kind of affection - just put on a show in public, thus her relationship with her mother portrayed like that.

I think Narcissa (and other pureblood girls) had to meet a lot of expectations, which is why she tries to act more mature and ladylike. Glad you liked that touch.

Yes, I always think pure blood marriages may be arranged to a large extent since their parents are always particular about who their kids should marry - no 'tainting' of bloodlines and such. I am pleased you liked it, and that you picked up on the hint! They weren't exactly dating, but secretly liked each other (the backstory in my mind is that Lucius himself suggested Narcissa as his bride to his father, and Abraxas Malfoy approved, and thus approached Narcissa's father).

Yes, having to behave in a certain manner in public, it indeed makes all their private moments all the more sacred.

I am pleased that the fragmented style worked. Well, thanks for your suggestion, but I wanted to highlight on Narcissa's important moments. I have many one-shots about her though, feel free to check them out, though I won't exactly call them ordinary. But maybe I'll just write a nice little fluffy 'ordinary' Lucius/Narcissa one-shot one day xD


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