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Review:Ardeith says:
Wow! I was checking your page to see if you updated your other story... I should be mad that you're neglecting it, but I loved this! I love unusual pairings and different time periods so this intrigued me.

Your Riddle is absolutely spot on. I think he is really hard to write because how can you make him charismatic enough to attract followers (especially at this point in his career) while still making him evil? Love everything you do with him here! I think you're the first fan fiction writer I've read who does such a wonderful job of demonstrating how powerful his magic is.

Here's just one of the details that I loved: " He kept his gaze trained on the eyes of painted figures passing them by, just as still and poised as Muggle art Ė not by choice but by obedient surrender to the will of their master. He didnít like the way they moved, the many ways they could think and fidget that he couldnít orchestrate."

Your ability to create a creepy atmosphere is great. Here are a couple of my favorite examples:

"face-framing tendrils curling towards her mouth on either side to provide the illusion of a maliciously wide smile."

" its roots curled inward like a corpseís rigid fingers"

Seriously, I could go through this chapter and pick out so many great examples! I didn't even get into the brilliance of having a Polyjuice potion masquerade ball...

Author's Response: Ardeith! ♥

At the risk of getting tomatoes thrown at me, I've deleted Godric's Hollow. I've lost count of how many times I opened that document and struggled trying to churn out words to no avail. I think most of the problem was that I plotted it out so excessively that the act of actually writing it didn't hold my interest. BUT, I definitely do plan on changing some things and posting it again as a short story. It'll be quite a bit different, most likely, but it's the only way I think I'll be able to finish it.

Tom Riddle is a tricky wizard to maneuver. Like you said, he was charismatic enough to attract followers, but still so evil, so exploring the way he managed to walk that line is actually quite fun. He's kind of malleable. He just becomes the type of person that the other person he's talking to wants to see. It's kind of creepy.

Thank you for pointing out examples of lines you liked! I love seeing specific bits that readers enjoyed.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Ardeith. Please don't be mad about Godric's Hollow! :( I tried so hard to force out chapters because I didn't want to disappoint my readers, but the idea of forcing out another 10-15 chapters kind of terrified me. But I promise it will appear on my author page again within the next few months.

- Sarah


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