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Review:adluvshp says:
Hello! Here to review your entry for my challenge.

Aw this was such a beautifully written piece. I absolutely loved your descriptions. I think you did a great job with the imagery and the colours and such. The plot itself was very nice, though so sad. I liked the concept of her going away so 'happy', almost painlessly, in a fantasy-ish way.

The bit about Cancer was very true and very touching though, and the end, though it broke my heart, it almost made me a smile a small sad smile.

The only CC I have is that the transition from the happy 'fantasy' to the sadness and to the 'cancer' paragraph was a little too abrupt. Maybe you can put in a dividing line there, or another paragraph/sentences to smooth the transition. I also noticed a very small grammar error that you spelt "cheek" as "check".

But apart from that, this was a very well-written touching story, and I liked your writing style as well as plot. Good work!

Thanks for participating in my challenge. You'll know the results in a few weeks/days!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi Aditi!!

Thank you so much!! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it!! I had a lot of fun writing it :) I think we all wish that our loved ones pass away painlessly, and I'm glad that it reflected in my story.

Thank you so much for that advice!! Now that I read through it, I realise that it is too abrupt. I will definitely change that asap :) Oh and that spelling error. I really need to proof read things when i'm not deliriously sleepy in the wee hours of the morning. Bad habit ;)

Again, Thank you!!! Looking forward to knowing the results!! Thank you for such a inspiring challenge!!

Thanks as well for such a lovely review!!
- Abhi


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