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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for review tag (version 3.0 hehe).

Ah this seems like an interesting story. It is definitely a new perspective on things as usually Victoire is portrayed as this really proud and haughty person and Teddy smitten by her and she pushing him around (well that's the kind of fics I've come across), so it's a fresh outlook to see Teddy trying to convince Victoire to date him. I like the whole idea of "opposites attract" or not too, and would love to see how you explore it further.

A little CC - I think you should polish your grammar a little. There are no glaring errors but a few small ones like "you're" instead of "your" and some awkward sentence phrasing here and there can interrupt the flow. I suggest getting a beta or giving this a thorough re-read (possibly aloud). Also, this being a prologue, I'd love to see more descriptions in it to establish the setting instead of jumping into the action. Perhaps the first paragraph can be a description of the scene and setting and stuff, before you actually get down to the thoughts and dialogue and such. It usually builds the story well. Just a thought =)

Over all, this was a good starting chapter though and I liked reading it. It was light and sweet, and made me look forward to the more. Good job! Keep writing!


Author's Response: I love your reviews, they're always so helpful. Anyway.

I've personally never pictured Victoire as haughty or really REALLY proud. It's just that from the family that she comes from it doesn't make sense for her to be a little stuck up.

As soon as I get my computer working I will definitely fix my grammar more and make it a lot better. The grammar was bothering me as well. I took your advice for the description and I've added a paragraph or two to the beginning.

Thanks so much for the awesome feedback!

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