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Review:potterfan310 says:

I am a huge fan of James II stories and teen pregnancy ones so this is great!

Oohh I really like that it started off as a summer fling, that's really original!!

I really like your OC, she seems to have a great personality and it's nice to see she isn't from a wizarding family as well!

It's really original that James and Scorpius are friends rather than Scorpius and Albus which is usually the norm, so it's nice to seem something different. :)

- There are quite big gaps between sentences and paragraphs and it can sometimes make it ard to read.

- "So we are completely" - Might just want to change the 'we' and 'are' around so it makes more sense.

- 'my mom who' - Brit picking, I notcied you did it a few times, I'm guessing this is set in the Uk so it would be mum not mom.

- 'are over I reminded myself' - To make this flow a little smoother, perhaps add a common between 'over' and 'I'.

- 'I don't normally shag around' - Again to make it flow a bit better try sleep around rather than shag.

It'll be intresting to see how things turn out, if they're just 'friends' and Claire finds out she's pregnant. I have a feeling that James will stick around since he really seems to like Claire and Claire really likes him back from what I've gathered.

Your charcaters are really interesting and I like your take on James so far, and Dom. And your OC's Claire and Emily are great too!! I can't wait to read more about them all.

I think this is a really great start and I can't wait to read more. Deffo adding this to my favourites!!!

Soph x :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Gosh you're so nice. My poor American speaking habits--yikes haha. I'll try to fix those for the next chapter ;)

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