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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! I was excited to have a reason to get back to chapter three!

There were a lot of things I really loved in this chapter. I think the you did an excellent job putting Dom in a place that feels very realistic for the situation she's been through. She's had her life completely changes and it'll never be the same again. We know it's possible to still have an incredibly decent life under these conditions, but we watched Remus ruin half of his in self hatred. I really hope Dom is able to understand what Remus never really could and accept this. She has people that really love her, and unlike Remus who lost all those people for over a decade, it seems like they're going to stand by her. And that will make all the difference, I'm sure.

Anyway, back to what I was saying, I loved that you had her still so very upset still but sort of needing to move on. Her boss is there (though I'm curious if you meant to write the woman as mean she came off as) reminding her she has an article to complete, her work needs to be done, and she's put off her boyfriend for much too long.

The comment about her scar and Teddy's thoughts felt absolutely perfect. My sister has a scar that goes from the base of her neck all the way down her back to her hips. Not a small scar, a big scar, and after. seven years, it's still something she'll get moment of insecurity about. Having an ugly bite mark in such a fragile and delicate place would be a big deal to the person wearing it, so I'm really happy you didn't gloss over that.

The memory with Dom and Teddy + Victoire and bf, was really sweet and I loved seeing how they started dating. If felt a bit formal at times, nothing that turned me off or anything.

The only thing I'd really suggest is in your last section, and that's to clarify if she's still in the hospital or has gone home. It felt like at the end of the first section that since she's going back to work soon, she'd be well enough to head home. So when that last section started her I imagined her as being home. But then I thought it was odd that Fleur and Bill hadn't insisted on being with her or her coming to stay with them, and that's when I realized she may still be in St. Mungo's :P. Maybe just saying something small at the start like, 'reading the material she'd had brought from her flat to the hospital..' Just to continue giving you reading a clear picture of where we are.

Awesome chapter as always, m'dear! ♥

Author's Response: Hey hon! Thanks for reading and reviewing. Sorry for the late response.

I am glad you found a lot of things likeable in this chapter. Yes, Dom's life will never be the same again and I tried to portray her thoughts as realistically as possible. Well, whether Dom accepts it or not, we'll only find out in the very later chapters.

I exactly meant to write her boss the way she came across, and you'll see why in the next 2-3 chapters. Indeed, Dom now needs to start dealing with things, especially since more 'stuff' is coming along the way.

I always believe that scars, being physical reminders of what we've endured, can have huge impacts on people, so I included that for Dom. Pleased you liked it =)

I am glad you liked the memory as well. I'll try to go back and edit out the formality.

Um, actually Dominique is back at home and I hinted that in various places, like-

"Dominique stared at the blank wall in front of her silently, perched on the edge of her handsome black couch."

"As she allowed her gaze to wander around her living room, a sigh escaped her."

"After she had been discharged and allowed to move back into her home, a stream of people kept coming to visit her every few hours or so."

Isn't it clear enough through these sentences that she's back home?

Thanks for all your lovely comments!


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