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Review:marauder5 says:
This chapter was just as brilliant as I had expected! You probably already are, but just in case you're not I'll tell you that you should be so, so proud of this story! To be honest, I think it's my favorite story on this site :)

It was so nice (and a bit confusing, as I've always only seen him as evil) too see Yaxley portrayed as a loving and devoted father. Tor seems to admire him so much, and I actually think it's sweet. But at the same time, I think it's sad, because it's because of him that she has all those prejudices etc.

I also really liked to see Tor picturing, just for a moment, what her life would be like if her Dad hadn't been a Death Eater - how she would be able to introduce Terry to him. It was a very cute moment.

I couldn't believe it when Tor asked Yaxley about it! But I guess she is changing in a way. She's starting to doubt the whole thing.

The second part of this chapter had many different objectives, it jumped between past and present, and that's quite a challenge for an author. However, I think that you've handled it really well! It was not even the slightest bit confusing, which is quite an accomplishment. So congratulations on that ;)

Tor listening in on her father and Snape through the eyes of the mouse was very clever of you! That whole scene was great, and I think that you ended the chapter perfectly with the mouse dying (even though it was, as you put it, rather morbid. It was still the perfect ending to this chapter.

The story just keeps getting better. Hmm, they'll try to attack the Burrow? Considering the fact that you try to stay true to the books, I assume the attack will not be successful. I do hope Voldemort won't punish Yaxley by doing something to Tor and Daphne, but maybe he will. It sounds like something he would do...

I can't wait to read the next chapter! It always makes me so happy when I see that you've added a new one :)

Author's Response: Oh yay!! Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked the chapter. I felt like it was a bit out of my normal chapter structure because it was all from one day, but I put in some switching perspectives to make myself feel better :P

Yaxley is really growing on me as a diverse character, I think that he's both selfish and loving but also committed to these values. However, I think that he's one of the Death Eaters who is in it for power, not necessarily because he cares about right and wrong, and Tor is starting to realize that.

I'm glad you thought I handled the perspective jumping well! I wanted to show how Snape might still hold some resentments towards Yaxley and the others-he is very stuck in the past when it comes to Lily and the Marauders after all.

Also, good to hear that you liked the scene with the mouse-Tor exercising her Legilimency powers. Good that you liked the ending as well, it was morbid but morbid is very fun to write!!

I have like four chapters already written and waiting to be published: the Christmas holidays for the Slytherins prove to be very eventful :P Thank you so much for the amazing review! :D


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