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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
I'm so unbelievably sorry how long it's taken me to get to your reviews. I'll bypass the round of excuses and just dive in!

This chapter really feels like you're really hitting your stride with Louis. He's continuing to grow as a narrator while still staying true to what you established in the first two chapters. His wit and somewhat self-defeating humor make him really likable.

I'm continuing to love the slow introduction of new characters. Shelby is a really interesting addition to the cast. Even if she doesn't return much later on, her brief appearance really gives some depth and background on Louis, but you've done it in a way that we the reader hardly realize it's happening.

The same goes for Lily too. That's one of my favorite thing about next-gen stories -- seeing how authors bring in familiar characters in unfamiliar ways. I like how she's a bit aggressive with Louis. It's nice to see a blend of personalities, and it's a good fit given her profession. Speaking of...

The plot is continuing to develop nicely, and I'm really glad to see Louis accept the job. That sets up a lot of possibilities down the road. But I'm really intrigued to see how, if at all, the newspapers/media might play into this. Clearly the werewolf bites are big news in the community. I'm wondering if public hysteria or werewolf prejudice will come into play in future chapters.

The only "major" issue I spotted was a slip in tense in the paragraph that starts: We reached the ER on the Dai Llewellyn ward and I follow Thomas... Also, in the line, "I can't say exactly whether Jonah will be stable enough to answer questions, especially since he's only six," Louis said. You switched to third person POV there.

Other than these two things, another solid chapter. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Becky! I'm glad you found this chapter to be a solid addition to push the plot along at just the right speed. Also, Lily will make other appearances later on. As for prejudices against werewolves, more on that later on down the road. So far I haven't written it in, but that's just because it hasn't really surfaced directly in the plot yet. It might by the next attack though.

Thanks for pointing out those errors. I think I already went back and edited those when I first read this review, but I can't remember. I'll have to go back and double check and if I didn't I will edit those mistakes. Thanks again for reviewing! (:


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