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Review:MissMoneypenny says:
Wow! Two new chapters! Boom!

So yeah, sorry I haven't reviewed for a while. I've been really busy with The Golden Age of the Marauders (Chapter 4 has been rejected twice so I decided to completely re-wrote it, check back Saturday and it'll hopefully be up) but I'M HERE NOW!

HE STOLE ELLA'S BREAKFAST! DAVIES STOLE HER BREAKFAST!
My thoughts on Davies: I don't really like him, TBH. He just seems a bit of a prick and I much prefer Finn.
I love Finn!!!
I don't think Ella and Chase are going to end up together because they're such different people, and Chase seems like a bit of a player. Also, Ella's a massive tomboy, so if she was going to have a boyfriend, I think it would most likely be Finn or someone from the Gryffie team.

I wasn't surprised Ella was made a tutor: I loved it when she Transfigured that kid into a teapot right back in the first chapter. Who loves foreshadowing? WE DO!
I would suggest that you possibly go back and edit the scene with Minne, though; make it a bit more teacher-y on her part, and Ella not say things like 'sure' to her- I just think she'd be a little too intimidated to say things like that.

Overall, I loved the two new chapters. On with Chapter 8!

Miss Moneypenny :-)

P.S Also, just a thought, it might be better to say "teasing" instead of taunting. Or maybe it's my grammar freak coming out in me...
(Sorry. It does that a lot.) Penny :-)

Author's Response: Hooray for another lovely review!
I can't tell you my thoughts of ella finn chase and the rest because i can't spoil the story (:
sadly, i only have 1 more chapter to post before taking a brief hiatus due to finals and important track meets- ): so i'm rapid-firing some chapters to tide y'all over.
i honestly can't think of anything else to say-- response-block!
keep on reading!
xoxo
Jilly


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