And it's me again, for your next review!!! :D
Once again, and sorry for going on about this, I love the descriptions you have of the house and the setting. They really add character and visual imagery (not to mention humour). I had no idea Phineas Nigellus was a painter and was inspired by the white cliffs of Dover! I also enjoy how prominent a role those house elves play.
I'm very curious to understand more about the will and why they're all so worked up about it. I guess in an aristocratic family like the Blacks possessions and wealth are quite important, and I feel as if more about this and the divides in the family will be described in future chapters. It could also add a motive to why someone would want to murder Cygnus. Maybe Voldy wanted one of the Black treasures to turn into a Horcrux?? haha, maybe I'm being a little over-paranoid, but some of his greatest Death Eaters are suspects, after all.
You have lots of clever little lines that I just feel I need to admire. For example: "Bellatrix declares, her voice loud and strong, smashing through the quiet of the room like a bull in a china shop. Then again, he supposes his mother has already killed the silence; Bella is just making absolutely certain that itís dead, like the sadistic cow that she is." BULL in a china shop... the sadistic COW... so good! :)
Oh no, poor Druella (assuming she's the woman at the end, as I can't imagine who else it would be!). However, I thought the last bit was a very beautiful passage. It gave Cygnus a little more of a presence, since we haven't learned much about him. I'd assumed he was arrogant and proud like the rest of the Blacks, but this paints him in a more sympathetic, romantic light which was very sweet. I also enjoyed Druella calling him her "swan king"-very appropriate considering his name! :P
I really hope you enjoyed these reviews and they were helpful for you! Please feel free to re-request when the next chapter of this wonderful story is validated! :)
Author's Response: Hey! Glad to see you back (and so soon! How do you do it? O.o)!
Thank you so so much - is it bad if I say please go on? haha - but no, I really, really don't mind. It's something I've been working on for a while, since I started writing, and so I'm glad you like it! Re Phineas Nigellus - I have no idea if he was or wasn't, since it never says, but in this he claims he was... which could really mean anything, lol. The house-elves will come into it more later, I think. I have plans for them *cackles* :P
Yeah, the will will be discussed more later on - I just don't want to dump loads of information all in one place (which also would defeat the purposes of the genre, I think), and be really boring, lol. So yeah, it's important to them and there are definitely divides in the family, which will become more apparent in later chapters as well (hopefully!). Haha, no, it's not that, though that would be quite cool...
I actually did not notice that until you pointed it out! 'Cow' was simply a usable word which, ah, portrayed certain emotions I wanted, lol. I didn't think about it, tbh... thanks for pointing that out, it was totally accidental! :)
Yep, it's Druella :) Gah, I'm so happy you liked it as it was so impossibly difficult to write. SO vague and just... ah. I think with Druella it's sort of how she thinks of him, not necessarily how he was all the time. And 'swan king' - now that was intentional, lol. I looked up the meaning of his name to get it, since things like 'dear' and 'darling' just didn't seem to fit... I'm glad you liked it!
Thank you so so much for your reviews - they've been incredibly helpful and just really lovely and sweet :) Thank you so much and I'll definitely pop by when you have a free slot when I update!