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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Val!

I loved all the little details you included in this chapter; it was just so lovely and added so much to the story. It was those little things about Astrid having knobbly knees and Xavier looking like an Irish famer, as it added a humorous element to the dark side of war.

The death of the mayor scene was really well written, and I can sense the nerves and anticipation they were feeling and I was probably as tense as they were!

The different sections work so well too! Usually itís so disjointed, but here the readerís lead in so easily, and it makes a really nice read. I liked how even though the sections are different, theyíre all inter-related at the same time, and it allows you to make connections between the past and the present.

Poor Johanna! That flashback was worked so well, and I think it was due to you getting into the gritty details of it, and not being afraid to show the harsh experience she was going through too. It was perfectly understandable what she had to do the baby, as you can tell how important the resistance movement was to her. It had such a sad and almost frightening atmosphere to it, and it was beautifully done.

It was interesting that the Ministry was so nice, as it contrasted so sharply with the harsh realities of outside, and how even though they were helping with the resistance movement, they were still spending a lot on decoration in the Ministry.

Iím still undecided about whether I like Paul Goldberg. I can see why the actions are necessary, but Iím with Johanna with this, as it does seem extreme to use illegal measures. Then the way he put her down by calling her mademoiselle, it almost seem to say she couldnít understand as she was only a woman.

I liked that Astrid was having doubts about the resistance, as they did do some horrible things too, and itís great that you highlighted that, and didnít make everything fine and dandy. I canít wait to find out about who this happened to, and what they did. And whether this does Astrid in her activities with the resistance or not!

An excellent chapter Val!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hi Kiana!

I'm glad you found that humorous, despite the circumstances. And I'm also glad you thought the mayor's death was well-written, because I don't like writing action scenes, and generally the result is terrible...

Working with sections is a bit of a pain, to be honest, but at the same time I wouldn't see myself writing this story in a different way as all characters have to their screen time. I've also discovered that I really liked flashbacks, so the sections are compulsory!

I felt so bad writing Johanna's flashback, it was horrible. The resistance movement is indeed very important to her, but that's not quite the reason why she did what she did -- I can't be more explicit about this here though, because it's not 12+, but it's touched on in the chapter.

The Ministry and Goldberg are definitely questionable, and I wanted to show that the powerful are less affected by the war. And Goldberg, sadly enough, does not escape this rule.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review! :)

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