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Review:TenthWeasley says:
I like this nice family scene, Harry and Ginny sitting down to talk with Lily about the war. I like to think that it's something that they would have done with all three of their children eventually -- it's too important otherwise!

There were several more typos in this chapter, and the formatting was a bit wonky, but it's nothing a quick bit of editing won't fix. :) I don't think Harry would call his own son thickheaded, either -- maybe self-absorbed? (Parents do call teenagers that!) Have you considered joining the HPFF forums and getting a beta reader? Beta readers are invaluable! And it's a great way to make a new friend, too.

And again, don't be afraid to elaborate! What prompted Lily to ask her parents about the war? What does she think about Uncle Fred? What does the room they're in look like? A story is very much helped by describing the setting, as well as infusing in the dialogue that keeps it flowing, which you're already good at.

Keep it up! More writing makes you better at writing, and you're already two chapters into your story, which is farther than many people get. You should definitely continue writing! ♥

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the wonderfull comments. I've just looked at all your stories, they're all amazing. Well done especially on commitment level!

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