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Review:TenthWeasley says:
This was cute! It was a bit short, but that's not always a bad thing. I liked the brother-sister relationships you already gave Lily with James and Albus, and especially how they taunt each other -- I don't think enough people capture that lovely aspect of family life. ;) Although the hat that James forced on Albus sounds horrible, oh my goodness!

If you wanted to extend this chapter a bit, I could suggest perhaps elaborating a bit and giving some backstory. I assume that the family is moving into Grimmauld Place, but why? How does Lily feel about it? Does she explore the house herself? Try picturing what she sees, hears, smells, and write it down!

This is a promising start -- definitely don't give up. :) Your summary was intriguing! I'm off to check out your second chapter, too!

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