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Review:nott theodore says:
In a strange way, it's quite nice to see that James has insecurities just like everyone else - although I guess actually caring about someone can do that to people! As far as women are concerned, James has always been so self-assured and just the fact that he is insecure about Carlotta shows how much he really cares about her.

I am so impressed by your attention to detail and the way you write the discussions about quidditch. The tactics and statistics all seem so realistic that it makes the story seem even more authentic - it's like the sport is one like football that actually exists in our world. I really enjoy reading all the possibilities for the match and the way you highlighted the importance of each role in quidditch. I'm really looking forward to seeing the game!

It's really good to see Carlotta back and her and James acting like a normal couple for once. I'm pleased James decided to trust her and explain the full story of what happened with Voldemort - I feel like it is a huge step forward for him and their relationship.

Your characterisation throughout this story is just so brilliant - each character has their own unique voice, and they never really seem to step out of character or do something that their personality wouldn't generally allow.

As much as I enjoy James, Carlotta and quidditch, I would like to see some more of his family in the next few chapters, particularly Lily! And I'm intrigued about how the situation between Brigid and Freddie will develop!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: James has a ridiculously large number of insecurities, although most of those are about Quidditch more than his appeal to women! But yes, his feelings regarding Carlotta definitely stem from just how much she means to him. :) I absolutely love writing them when they're being all coupley and normal. And yes, he definitely needed to sit down and finally tell her everything!

I'm glad you liked the strategy chat, I didn't have any of it planned so I kind of made it up as I went along, but I really like how it panned out. :)

The whole family begin to feature more in the next few chapters, never fear! And the Freddie/Brigid storyline will start to unfold soon as well. Next chapter should be up soon, thanks for reviewing!


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