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Review:Maelody says:
OK sorry it took me a while to get over here! I read it earlier and then I got super busy, but I'm here now! :D

Well, I can definitely say your first chapter has me hooked to read the rest. I like the idea of it, and I'm glad you've made the first chapter this way. It is nice to see that there is something going and and to see just exactly what it is instead of waiting for it to be explained. I think you did a lovely job of making it clear just what we should be expecting to see out of these two, and I'm excited to see what you do with it! :)

My only problem with the whole chapter, and it wasn't really a problem, just an odd word composition for my taste, but the very last sentence seemed a bit odd to me. I feel like it could have left off on a darker note, and the way it ended just seemed a little sudden, but that's entirely me I'm sure! Great job and I'm excited to read more. :)

Author's Response: It's fine that you took a while, I'm in no rush!

I actually took the idea of the beginning from the prolouge of the Goblet of Fire. I wanted to hook the readers, since the first several chapters move a bit slowly.

Hmm, that's interesting about the last sentence. I've just never thought about it, but you're right, it does end pretty sudden. I'll think about changing that.

Thanks for the lovely review!


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