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Review:nott theodore says:
AN UPDATE! YAY!

^Sorry about that. Moving on...

You know, one thing about your version of James is that he never fails to make me laugh. His thought process is so completely random and chaotic but I think that makes it even more hilarious.

Actually, I was laughing through the entire chapter. Especially when Ginny got drunk, and even more so when James received that book as his punishment!

I think one thing that I'd really love to see more of is all of these nice qualities that Selene supposedly has. I like the fact that her loyalty really came through in this chapter, but sometimes it is difficult to see why James likes her so much. Although I have to say, I do agree with Albus. James needs to man up and ask Selene out!

I thought this whole chapter flowed really well and I do love your characterisation!

Just a few typos I noticed:
'sleep wins over you and my conscious' - this should be conscience?
'some desire to self-sacrificially kind to you.' - be kind to you?
'see to think' - seem to think?

On a slightly irrelevant note, gallivanting is a brilliant word!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: No need to apologize - I'm aware this took a long time - extra long, since the chapter was rejected at first.

Yes, I do know that I haven't shown much of Selene's better qualities. And this, actually, has been done purposefully. We see her from James's perspective, but I want people to understand her a bit more from other people's perspective. That way, when we do see more of Selene, it will really hit you :) I have plans for this. Believe me, I have plans.

Thanks for pointing out the typos! Like I said, I never edited this, so I'm actually surprised you didn't find more! I'll go back through and re-do this eventually.

Thanks for a very lovely review!

-Laura


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