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Review:nott theodore says:
Wow. This was not at all what I expected to happen in this chapter. It was even better! I really love your writing style and as soon as I've finished reading this story I'm already planning on reading everything else you've written.

I love your portrayal of Helga in this chapter because it's really original. I haven't read any stories in which Helga is a 'trendsetter' sort of character who breaks with tradition. I like the relationship between Rowena and Helena as well, and the way that the two are really quite similar in some aspects. I'm interested as to how the relationship between the two of them is going to deteriorate like I know it will (which I really don't want to happen - I need to stop becoming so invested in fictional characters!).

I kind of hate Venn in this chapter. His Slytherin personality really comes through and his contemptuous treatment of the peasant was really horrible. I hate the fact that he's cheating to try and win the tournament as well. I really want to know how it ended!

Not that this is relevant, but I was actually wondering if apparition had begun yet since so far they've been travelling in carriages.

I can completely understand why Helena feels so wretched at the end of this chapter. I feel really sorry for her here. It must be horrible for her to see this side of Venn which she probably didn't believe existed.

I'm going to stop writing this now (I'm not even sure it was coherent!) so that I can carry on reading!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for popping by again :)

And WOW, that is a huge compliment! Thanks!

Yep, the deterioration of Helena's relationship with her mother will begin to figure more and more prominently in the plot from here on out. They are alike in many ways, like how strong they are, but they also diverge, and the difference in years shows between them.

Haha, you're supposed to! He's not a nice person here, at the height of competition. It's great that you felt like he embodied true Slytherin values, though, because that's exactly what I was going for there.

Actually, apparition wasn't invented until much later--at least, I seem to recall researching it and finding that to be so. Regardless, that's how it is in this story :)

Yeah, Helena got a nasty shock. Her prince isn't so charming all the time after all. Unfortunately, she's too headstrong to listen to her better judgment at times, as you'll see if you continue on...

Thanks for this lovely review, NT!

-Amanda



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