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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! We accidentally overlapped each other in the review tag, and so I decided to check out your stories anyway. And I'm very glad I did!!! :)

I really like this as a first chapter! First of all, I was excited to see Daphne and Theo as your characters, since they figure in one of my stories (although yours seem significantly nicer!). The descriptions of the cafe and of Daphne's dedication to it were well written and gave me a very clear mental picture. I especially liked the line: "Everything from the walls that Theo had helped her to paint lilac, to the menus chalked up over the counter was there because she had put it there; she had wanted it to be there." It's an idea that I find very universal and believable.

Poor Eleanor-I feel as if in future chapters she'll be getting into some trouble!

The part about her wishing wizards had a calculating machine was also just great. I wonder how they continue to get by without technology?

I'm also very interested for Theo's introduction into the story. Their friendship seems very sweet, but I also enjoyed Daphne's little fantasies about dating him.

Something that really intrigued me were the family dynamics of the Greengrasses. First of all, how Daphne's mother is arrogant and very different from how Daphne now presents herself. Also, the hinting at the relationship between Daphne and her sister-seems to me like Astoria is a bit of a drama queen, but I'm interested to read about her leaving her husband-assuming it's Malfoy!

Daphne's thoughts and reflections about the past and the war was also brilliant, and I suspect setting up some strong background for future chapters. I'm definitely interested to read about her experiences in the war and how she has recovered. The characterization was very appealing.

Overall, great work! :)

Author's Response: Aww that's so kind of you! Thank you very much for leaving a review, and such a great one at that!

**High fives fellow Daphne & Theo author** I've never written about them before, so it's great to hear from someone who has!

I have such a clear picture of the cafe in my head, and I was anxious to get it over, so I find it great that you liked the description of it.

Haha yes, poor Eleanor! You are absolutely right, there is a fair amount of trouble coming her way in later chapters! :P I'm glad you picked up on the calculating spell... The wizarding world is pretty awesome, but there are some things I think us Muggles do well!

I thought quite a lot about the Greengrass family, and about how they would feel about one another in light of their past. Astoria is a LOT of a drama queen, but she's very fun to write! Her husband wasn't actually Malfoy, but he will make an appearance later...

I'm so pleased that Daphne's reflections on the war came across and worked in the chapter! This was- hopefully- quite a cheerful one, but a lot of this story is going to be about Daphne leaving her Slytherin-y past behind. It's wonderful to hear that that aspect of it sounds interesting!

Thanks again for such a sweet review- it made me really happy! It was so kind of you to leave one :)


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