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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there Iím here with your review for the Mumford & Sons challenge!

Iíve read quite a few Victoire/Teddy/Dom love triangle stories before, but I donít think Iíve come across one quite as convincing as yours. I think the reason why it was so effective was the first paragraph where we get to meet young Dom, and how she was basically talking about the situation she ended up in later. It was a nice use of foreshadowing, and it was nice to see a more innocent Dom.

You conveyed the emotions she was feeling brilliantly. It was so angst filled which I love, as the emotions are so deep and realistic and it was brilliantly done here. Then you could sense how Dom loved Victoire, but she loved Teddy, and it was a question of which love was more powerful. I liked how you added in regret, as I never really come across it much, but it was a bittersweet moment when she was wishing she could be young again.

I really liked your characterisation too. Domís confusion was captured perfectly, and you could tell she was a nice person at heart. I like the intriguing and cynical Teddy you went for, as I think given what happened to his parents, and the way he was brought it could happen. Poor Victoire being analysed for being so happy. Even though she wasnít a main feature of the story, I really did feel for her.

I really liked how the love she felt for Teddy changed as they both aged. It meant the situation they ended up in was more realistic. How he was her hero at a young age, then a lover, now she seemed a bit unsure. I think it was the bit about how he says he will leave Victoire but doesnít, shows that sheís beginning to doubt him and not trust him as much.

Ah the ending! It was perfect. I think the one-shot would have lost itís power if we had a conclusive one, and thatís saying something as I usually hate cliff-hangers. I would like to think Dom would leave him, and that she would do the best for her and her sister, but I guess weíll never know!

It was a great use of the quote, and the results should be up soonish!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hello! And thank you for your review!

I'm so glad you liked young Dominique. She's a character I got to know really well when I was writing this, so it's good to know that other people like her too! It's great that you found Teddy and Dominique realistic as well- like you say, Teddy can't have had an easy childhood, and perhaps that's why he's ended up in the situation he's in. Really, I think that he's hardly better off than Dominique...

The emotions were sort of the focal point of this, so you can imagine how happy it makes me to read that they came across well! I like that you liked the development of their relationship- I wanted to lay the foundations for how they all ended up deeply, so that it didn't feel forced...

Ahh I'm so glad to hear the ending came off alright- and from someone who doesn't like cliffhangers!

Thanks again for such a wonderful review, and for all your kind words! This was a great challenge :)

-Bethany x

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