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Review:Lululuna says:
This was sweet, I liked it! The personification of Rose was exactly how I imagined her: Hermione's nerdiness mixed with Ron's moodiness. My favourite line was the simple but effective "Rose was not amused."

I also enjoyed how Scorpius is portrayed, and that it's hinted that he possibly wasn't shown a lot of affection as a child, which implies a complicated family dynamic. Perhaps that's why he's spending Christmas with the Potters... That being said, I think a bit more detail and context would strengthen the story.

I liked how they go on a rampage through a supermarket- I will admit to walking through one before and wishing I could just go crazy in it, haha.

Just something that stood out: the line "Would it be bad that I told you we did not see him for the rest of the night?" is very funny and well placed, as silly Albus was just supposed to go around the corner. However, I think it would be more effective if you made it a definitive statement instead of addressing the reader, for instance "We didn't see him for the rest of the night." You have some good one-liners and they deserve to stand out! :)

Overall, very lovely little scene. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it! I will be sure to strengthen Scorpius' back story! Thanks again for the time to review :)

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