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Review:DancingMooncalf says:
I see what you mean about the many plot lines that all seem to go their own way. How many are weaving togehter now, 3 or 4? Maybe they will all come together in the end?

I think it's nice because it really makes me want to read on, but I don't think there should be more story lines, it would get a little complicated that way.

You asked if Nathan was to flawless, I don't think he is. He didn't have an easy start in the story, very scared and still a bit timid. You could try and keep that bit in, since it is really what makes him so adorable.

I can say all this, but since you already wrote the next 10 chapters it won't make much of a difference...
It's great that Connor and Charlie met each other, so they don't have to be sad and friendless all the time. I'm guessing there is more to that story, though.

Does the van have something to do with the muggles that were in Diagon Alley?

I realise that this review is a little bit all over the place, forgive me since it is already 00:20 over here. I'm just a little bit tired.

Maya

Author's Response: I promise there are no more plotlines. Connor and Charlie's story is the last of the new ones!

I managed to scare myself yesterday when I wasn't paying attention properly walking down that very road, when a white van went past... funny how the human brain works.


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