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Review:nott theodore says:
First of all, I'm really sorry that it's taken me so long to get back and review this chapter!

Once again, I really enjoyed this chapter. I really love all of your description and some of your sentences are just so beautifully crafted that I have to read them a few times over. This line "Atop the magnificent black courser, another heart beat out an evenly spaced tune." in your opening paragraph was really perfect!

The beginning of this chapter gripped me instantly; I felt carried along with all the movement of the horse and you pulled me straight into the chapter.

One of my favourite parts of this story is the fact that you include all the little details which make it seem very authentic for the time. I really enjoy reading how you came up with the first and second names as well; it's really interesting! It was really good to see some of the old pureblood families in this chapter, and it's quite strange and quite a nice change to think of them in a pleasanter context than the one we've seen them in the books.

Another thing I enjoyed was the way that Venn was thinking about Helena, although I'm really glad that he hasn't suddenly started believing himself in love with her - I think that would be a really easy thing to do. I really love the fact that both Venn and Helena seem to be strong characters, especially for the time they lived in.

It was interesting to see the beginnings of the conflict that changed Hogwarts forever here. I'm really intrigued to see how you develop everything and I love the little details and intricacies that you're including in the plot. This is such a brilliant chapter and story!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Hey, no worries! I'm flattered that you even think highly enough of the story to come back and leave me so many beautiful random reviews. My only regret is that I can't provide you with thoughtful responses more quickly :)

I'm glad you liked the beginning with the hunt scene! I feel like it's too description-heavy, but it was fun to follow Venn along as he enjoyed one of his favorite pastimes. I love just dropping readers right into the action.

It's great to hear that you like hearing all my little details, too. I really did think hard about every bit of these opening chapters, and though I have less time for fic research now, I still try to make things as authentic as I can. Part of the fun for me is also tying in a lot of canon with some original ideas and historical allusions, like with the pure-blood families.

Venn and Helena are definitely both tough in their own ways, and part of their journey will be letting themselves fall for one another and discovering that it's okay to be really, truly in love. Naturally, this won't be easy for either of them. I've really loved writing their story, trying to bring it out and flesh it out more so that it's not just a quick canon anecdote.

Thank you for yet another lovely review :)


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