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Review:TheHouseElf says:
Hey dear, here from the review thread!

I love this story, great start :D Ellie's gift with ghosts is sure different from everybody else's ordinary talents. The humour in this wasn't too forced, you did get a chuckle or two out of me - and I'm a tough crowd, trust me ;)

I liked your characters, though I have to say I'm with Albus and Chris on the drinking out of a carton thing...but that's just because I'm lazy :P I liked Rose and Ellie too, especially in the scene with Cassandra and how Ellie doesn't hold with that nonsense :D

The flow could've been better though, there was a lot of short, fragmented scenes that didn't lead on to each other. Plus, as conversations go, these were a little short. And a little bit of britpicking, we don't say malls, we say shopping centres or the name of the place ;)

Overall though, this is a really interesting story and I'd love to see how it plays out :D

~Aisha

Author's Response: Hola!

Ghost perception is a cut above your average gifts, I suppose! And thank goodness you found the humour okay! I have a really dorky sense of humour!

I drink out of the carton as well, so Albus, Chris, and I are all on the same page with that! And concerning Cassandra - you thought it was nonsense? Don't be too quick to dismiss...

I have problems with flow, so thank you for pointing that out. I endeavour to improve with concentrated effort, practise, and time! I don't know what I was thinking with malls - I'm Australian - we say shopping centres, too. I blame a reread of Nancy Drew for that!

Thanks for the review!


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