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Review:patronus_charm says:
I love it when people take canon characters and fill in the bits we donít know about them, so of course I was going to read this :D

I really liked how you showed how broken he had become. I always disliked him, as he always held himself so highly, so I found him almost likeable here as he was in such a deteriorated state you couldnít help but pity him, as it was just so sad to see him like that.

You really got into the desperate mind-set he must have been in. The isolation felt so scary, that you couldnít help but want to free him from it. I liked how you showed that it could have been either the dementors who caused him to be like that, or just being on his own, as it showed how truly terrible Azkaban is.

The contrast of when he was thinking of Narcissa and Draco was really lovely. It filled with me all these nice fuzzies about them. I liked how you showed that he really did care about them, and that there family life wasnít a pretence as that seems more accurate and believable.

Your description was really great here too, and you could really get sense of his surroundings and his emotions. I could envisage them so much, that I felt that I was experiencing all of these things with him.

The ending was great too, the last few lines were perfect Ė ĎAnd Lucius screamed. And then he cried.í, as it really showed how much fear had changed him, and how he had resorted back to childlike tendencies.

It was a great one-shot, and I hope to see more from you ;)

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hey! I'm SO sorry it took me this long to respond to this. I assure you it's not because I didn't appreciate it, I just never got around to doing it. But I'm here now!

Missing moments are definitely one of my favourite parts of the books as well. The HP verse is so big and there are so many gaps to fill that I never grow bored with toying with ideas of "what might have happened then?". I love "what ifs"

I never particularly liked him either. I never set out to writing this fic so that people feel sympathy towards him, but I'm glad you do because I do too. Even if he did terrible, terrible stuff I never could actually dislike him wholeheartedly. I only wished someone would show him a bit of humility and knock some sense into him. I never wished for him to live all that he's lived :(

I never really bought those stories where he is an abusive father and husband. It never occurred my mind to see him like that. I actually think that his family was the main drive in everything he did. In his own weird, twisted way, he wanted to provide for his family and wanted what was best for them. Thus losing himself in so many mistakes. I tried to show that, at least as briefly as I could before it turned into his nightmare.

I'm so happy you liked me story! It means the world to me :D Thank you for reviewing


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