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Review:Pheonix Potioneer says:
First, I'm really sorry I haven't reviewed this yet, since unfortunately, I'm a very busy person, especially in springtime.

When I saw the title and summary, I thought that this was the chapter where we finally figured everything out. Guess not.

Weird having first-years talking about girlfriends, but it's very realistic. I'm actually quite surprised J.K. Rowling didn't mention much about crushes or anything until Harry's fourth year.

Rose has the exact same flaw Hermione had- not telling people about their plans! When Hermione didn't mention anything to Harry and Ron in the COS, it could have caused the ending of Hogwarts.

Of course, it's probably important that we don't know what Rose is thinking because it causes suspicion.

Pity Hufflepuff lost. At least you made them have a pretty good Quidditch team, and you didn't make them dead last in everything.

Hmm, I still wonder about Angie's past. It seems weird that they didn't have a computer. Pretty much everyone I know has one.

I feel, at the very end of the chapter, that dream is a lot more important than it seems. I can't quite put my finger on it, but something makes my brain click in that last sentence.

Please keep writing! I really want to know what happens next!

Author's Response: Chapter 24 is in the queue now, so you shouldn't have to wait too long to find out what Rose's plan is. The queue is long enough at the moment, but it should be up Mondayish, at a guess.

The revelation should be either chapter 25 or 26. I'm currently writing chapter 25 and after 900 words, they're still nowhere near the revelation, so it could well go into the next chapter, but that's the furthest it'll be.

I actually spent a long time debating the title of this chapter, because I was afraid people would expect something more dramatic than just a model being damaged, but it did fit so well that I couldn't resist it.

The bit about not telling what Rose is thinking is more that the plan is rather complicated and I thought it would seem a bit improbable if she was like "oh, I've just figured out what we'll do. We'll do x first and then we'll do y and then..." Plus there are a few things that'll contribute to it she doesn't know yet. So both Albus and the readers will have to wait until all the parts come together and it actually makes sense.

But yeah, she is rather like Hermione and even more certain of herself than Hermione, I'd say, so she just expects Albus to wait and let her figure things out. And he does.

Oh, I was debating quite a while who should win the Quidditch Cup. I thought about having Gryffindor win, so James would be on the winning team, but there are reasons I decided on this result.

And I also have reasons for wanting Slytherin to be the worst team, but those are related to year 2, not this one.

Angie not having a computer is a bit of a hint at her past.

And the talk about girlfriends and boyfriends just kind of happened. I hadn't actually planned that. But yeah, when I was at school, girls started talking about boys somewhere between 5th class and 1st year (our 6th class matches Hogwarts 1st year and our 1st year matches their 2nd year, more or less). People didn't date until 1st year or later, but definitely girls were talking about "wouldn't it be great to get a Valentine's day card?" or what boys they'd like to ask them out or stuff before that.

Thanks so much for the review. Don't worry about not having done it immediately. There's no rush.


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