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Review:PolyJuice_ says:

*ahem* Spaz attack over.

So when I was looking through your author page looking for a story to review I realised you'd written this story and I knew I had to review it. I've been following it since it was pretty new, and loved every step of the way.

Your characters mature and age well, as if they were real. But even more than that *you* improve. Each chapter gets progressively better, from grammar to flow to everything.

Your plot could not have been better, *coughunlessyoumakeTorialiveagaincough* it's totally original. I've not seen anything like it, and I must say, it's wonderful.

The only thing I'd say is that you rush your chapters. Each chapter has enough events in it that you could stretch them out and expand on details and stuff to make them double the length. Instead of just saying, "I walked to the party where my boyfriend was." you could say something like, "I walked into the party and it was wonderful. There were golden streamers everywhere and I could tell that tonight..."

But aside from that it was superb! Looking forward to the last *gulp* chapter.

Please don't make it end,

Author's Response: Thank you so much for review! It makes me so happy to hear that I've actually had a follower since near the beginning of the story - I still remember how excited I was when I got my first ever review.

Thanks again!

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