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Review:TheHistoryGirl says:
Ok, so this was an EXCELLENT follow up from the first chapter!
Your characterisation in this chapter was quite simply fantastic! You've done a brilliant job in your exploration of Bellatrix's character so far. I particularly found your portrayal of her relationship with her father to be very realistic. The whole idea of Cygnus treating her mainly as an apprentice of sorts rather than just a daughter encapsulates perfectly JK Rowling's own portrayal of the traditional Black family values.
There's something extremely disturbing about reading a story from the point of view of a child who is so helplessly brainwashed at such an early stage in her life. Don't get me wrong, it definitely adds to the overall entertainment and credibility of the piece but I just felt the need to point that out for the sake of giving detailed feedback.
I cannot fault you on your writing; this was clearly very attentively crafted and I know I must sound repetitive in most of my reviews (because so far I've only been reviewing the good stuff)when I say this to writers but I just really appreciate it when an author can write well and I just have to let them know that.
Overall a really nice chapter. I've added this to my favourites so that I can keep an eye on it in the future for any more updates. I noticed that you said you intend to work on this weekly. Well if you do end up updating and I don't notice don't hesitate to give me a nudge on the forums to let me know (although only If this doesn't inconvenience you; I probably will notice the updates anyway).
Great Chapter!
THG

Author's Response: Hi Liv!! I was so worried to how people would take this much more normal chapter after the chaotic first. I'm really happy you thought it was a good follow up!

Brainwashed!!! That's the exact word for what she is. She seems like such a strong character when you just think about it, but she's really one of the weakest in the series. She needs approval from someone. When we know her, it's Voldemort. But I think the idea of it being her father back when she was younger really fit, so I'm extra happy you like that!

Aww I'm so happy you want to follow this!! I always post a status when I update as well, if that helps :)!

Thank you again m'dear for all your wonderful feedback. Your reviews really have been such a lovely treat ♥

Jami


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