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Review:HuffleyPuff says:
Final review!

You made a mistake here, wizards are not allowed to use magic outside of school until they are 18 years old, not seventeen and so she should be worrying about getting a warning owl from the ministry ;) That is something you might want to edit out, but then it would make this chapter even shorter than it already is. I also feel this chapter is a little pointless, just some banter between three girls which could have easily been added on to the previous chapter to increase that length and so chapter five could be something longer instead of a filler.

As there is not much text here I don't really having anything else to say besides that this shouldn't really be a chapter of it's own and should instead be added on to the previous chapter at the end. But that is my only fault with it.

So that's me done. This has been an interesting story so far and it will be interesting to see what happens next in this tale, but you may want to think about hurrying things up so we can actually see Nicholas instead of just talking about him. Good luck and happy writing!

HuffleyPuff x

Author's Response: I'll correct my mistakess

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