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Review:HuffleyPuff says:
I am here for the second review!

UGH You did the POV swap half way through a chapter! I am really no big fan of when people just switch POV's half way during a chapter, it really throws me off my reading and I have to pause for a moment to get used to reading from another person's point of view. Another thing I am not too keen on in the fact of how much muggle things they have. I am sure that even as the times change and Draco may be different from the person he once was, I still don't think he children would have this much Muggle things. And in Britain you can't take your driving test until you are 17. But that's just a silly little fact.

What I did like was the much better characterization and the description you've used in this chapter. This is a much better step up from the previous chapter, but I still do think you are dragging things on a little. I believe this chapter and the last could be combined together to make a large chapter so it stops dragging things out a little longer than need be.

So far you have an interesting plot and I am interest to see what happens next.

HuffleyPuff x

Author's Response: omg yay *happy dance* i like your review style
its not that critical or overwhelming
its balanced
thankyou soo much

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