First to address your comments in your AN: I LOVE following the dialogue. I think you write it with a very smooth touch. There are enough tags to understand who is saying what, but you don’t over to it or make it feel monotonous at all. Darcy is a really fun outside perspective considering the rest of our MC’s are all related. I loved her thoughts about the flower box. I totally thought how funny it would be if they were their ‘name’ flowers, so when they were and she basically thought, ‘really?’ I totally Lol’d. Darcy and I are going to continue getting along very well, I think.
Later in the chapter, Dominique’s evaluation of why the two work well together with their contrasting appearances, at least to the public eye, was so awesome! It made perfect sense. Every man is attracted to a certain kind of woman, even if it’s the sort of woman he’d never want to actually be involved with but is really intrigued by. I’d even go as far to say every woman has a specific kind of woman they want to be like. Some days you might want to be all Angelina Jolie or Keira Knightly hard core, other days you might wish you were more softer and just a naturally charismatic person like Rachel McAdams. I never really thought of how genius it was to have both kinds of women working along side one another for their modeling, but it really is! Maybe you should be an agent :P.
Darcy was clearly out of her comfort zone but still acted perfectly natural. You can tell she doesn’t love to be surrounded by divas, but she still plays the part well and it’s necessary to further her career. She’s devoted to what she does, though she currently isn’t loving exactly what that is, and she isn’t this socially awkward person who can’t handle these kind of situations. I really, really love that because I feel like so many OC’s have been cropping up as these quirky girls who stammer their way through situations but are still adorable. Not that there’s anything wrong with that, but Darcy feels a million times more realistic. More than that, I actually found myself liking her. The sort of, ‘this girl would be nice to be friends with,’ kind of life.
I’m excited to watch her and Albus’s next encounter! You set up just enough, hmmm without making it feel *too* set up. I think that they’re really going to enjoy one another, these two :D!
I really enjoyed this chapter and hope it doesn’t take nearly as long for me to get back for the next!
Also, you write these fluffier, easier sort of scenes really well. You’re a very diverse author, miss Amanda.
Author's Response: Ooh, that's great! This story is more dialogue heavy than a lot of my others, I think, and so I was worried that it would be too monotonous. It seems like it would be odd to be on the outside of the Potter-Weasley gang and to interact with so many of them at one time, particularly with Darcy being as awkward as she is at times. I love that you had a similar reaction to the flowers as her :)
Hah, I'll add 'modeling agent' to my list of back-up careers... though between you and me, just the motivation of wanting to stick it to my advisor is enough to make me want to finish the one I'm in! :D It's great that you like the idea of Lily and Rose's double act. I do think their differing personalities could enable them to become anything they needed to be for a particular photo shoot or runway show.
For some reason having an awkward main character seems to be integral to writing a next-gen story. It is comforting to hear that the sort of awkward I chose is at least realistic. She can still suck it up and deal with things at work that annoy her, and she's not falling over herself so much that she can't deliver a smooth line or enjoy a moment from time to time. I'm very proud of how she turned out and I think she's a bit like me, though I say that about most of my characters.
It's really great that you are enjoying the story so far and feel like I've pulled it off well. I'm so excited to hear what you think as you continue through the rest. Thanks again, dear!