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Review:academica says:
Hello Angie! I'm here for a little review tag :)

I see that you really took what I said about exploring Dominique's emotional turmoil to heart in this chapter. I really, really loved the part at the end where she saw the place that Teddy liked to kiss now marred by an ugly bruise, a physical reminder that life would never be the same again.

I also liked the flashback to when Dominique and Teddy first got together. It's clear that Victoire is really important to her baby sister, almost as important as Teddy is, and I'd love to see you explore that more in a future chapter. I'm sure the preservation of that sisterly bond will be extremely important to helping Dominique cope with things.

Dominique's interaction with her boss was intriguing as well. I liked how you noted that Delilah's attitude was quite callous at times, and that she seemed to want to exploit Dominique behind the veneer of total sympathy and pity. The only thing I was confused about there was the fact that the deadline for the article was unchanged. You would think they'd have to make accommodations of some kind, despite their personal feelings on Dominique's recovery. I think you could add in some more details there about why the deadline has to still be two days away (i.e., why can't the article be in a later issue?).

This is going along quite nicely, Angie, and I hope you're enjoying writing it! I'm so interested to see what's going on with Teddy in the next chapter.

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing. Sorry for the late response.

Yes, I tried my best to take all the reviewers' advice in consideration when writing this chapter, as well as when I edited the first chapter (I plan to edit the second one soon too). I am glad you liked the part about the scar. It is a reminder of how her life will not be the same and I figured it should have a huge impact.

Yes, I wanted to show that Vic and Dom's bond is strong, that they care for each other, and will not allow a guy to come 'in between't them. Dom's relationship with her mother, as well as her sister, will be explored in future chapters (not the immediate ones, but it will be done).

Dominique's boss is not very nice, haha. She is a very unsympathetic character - I believe every story needs one xP More on her boss will be shown later. Oh, thanks for pointing that out. I'll figure out a way to get around that.

I am enjoying writing it, yes, and I am pleased by the response it has received. I am happy you are liking it =) The next chapter is in the queue!

Thanks!


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