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Review:Neeka says:
I just started reading and I am absolutely loving the story so far! I like how it is different to the cliche while still following a reasonable storyline! I really didn't expect Albus and rose to be sorted into Ravenclaw and I can't wait to read more about the house's workings. You can already tell that this story is really well planned and that you've really thought about every character. I also really like albus, he's a lot like Harry but coming from a different situation (a wizarding family). The only suggestion i would have to make to add to the complexity of the story is maybe (once we've already started to like albus) show some faults in the character to make him a more realistic 11 year old. This was one of the best fan fictions I've read in a while though can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review. I'm glad your enjoying it so far and hope you continue to do so.

The whole Ravenclaw thing came up when I was trying to find a unique personality for Albus. I've already written a next generation story, that isn't anywhere near canon, as it was written before Half Blood Prince or Deathly Hallows came out and I didn't want Albus to just be another version of Harry's son in that. Nor did I want him to be just a repeat of Harry. So I started thinking of making him kind of studious and that of course, led to his ending up in Ravenclaw.

Yeah, the fact that Albus is coming from a very different situation - not just a wizarding family, but also a loving family - will play quite a large part in how he responds to things in the story.

As the story goes on, you will start to see some of Albus's insecurities and weaknesses, but you're probably right that I could put a little more focus on his flaws. Thanks for the advice.

Thanks again for the review.


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