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Review:HuffleyPuff says:
So I just so happened to stumble upon this fanfiction of yours and I do have to say that I am very glad that I did in the end. I am a big fan of Doctor Who and you captured him very beautifully. That cheeky, smart man who everyone falls in love with in the end. (Merlin don't you wish about that?) Anyways back to this review of mine. The flow of this, however was a little...off...if that's the right word to use in this situation. I do like how you made time pass by using the little snippets of Petunia's and the Doctor's adventures whilst Lily is away at Hogwarts, but somehow I just don't get a feeling for all the jumps you have. It would be nicer for time to pass just a little slower and I think that this story would be a little better off as a short-story instead and this way you can make the snippets from their adventures into a whole chapter of the story instead of a few words. That would be how I would do things and it may be something you want to think about when taking on something like this again if you ever decide too.

Another thing I am fond about in this story is the characterization. I love that you captured the Doctor's personality through the story and added in the things about Amy, Rory and even that little bit about Rose at the very beginning. I also like how Petunia developed through the story from being the girl who liked all the pretty things to the older Petunia who fell in love with the doctor and waited for him. This is why the end saddened me and I really wasn't expecting that. Two and a half years and passed and the doctor came back only to find that Petunia had gone and married Vernon and now they lived somewhere else. Her secret was gone and the Doctor was no longer her own little secret as Lily and James stumbled across him when he came back looking for Petunia. It brought a little tear to my eye and that's something that doesn't normally happen with me.

The plot was good, the description was better and the characterization and the plot twist and the end was the best bits! Defiantly adding as a favorite and please keep on writing like this!

HuffleyPuff x

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