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Review:Twinkleflower says:
Hey there, I think you have a small formatting issue with the spacing between paragraphs, but it does not detract from the story.

I thought this first chapter was a very nice start to your story. I like how you set the scene, letting the reader know that it is a different time period without actually stating the date, I thought this was cleverly done. Overall, your story flows very well and you have a nice writing style.

My only little niggle with this is there seems to be a fair bit of dialogue, although I find the amount can vary from chapter to chapter, and the conversation with 'the lady' and her parents is vital to the plot. I wouldn't change it in this chapter, but it is just something to think about when writing the next chapter. I hope you don't think I'm too critical because I really do like your fic :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you very much!

Yes, I've noticed that the word editor has it in for me. I have lost count of the times I've had to re-copy my chapter into the box because it added extra lines between. :)

I've already submitted my next chapter, but I will see about adding more descriptions in the story.

I'm trying something different with this story. The story will be told through letters to her family and Widow Bellum. When she writes to her family, it will be in the style of a fairy tale. This is a change from the typical story format that I use.


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