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Review:aquabluez17 says:
Heyy Grace!!

This is a great start! I was thinking of starting a Teddy/Victoire story too! haha great minds think alike :P

I like the plot you have here, though I feel that maybe adding a bit more description to why Teddy is so determined and why Victorie is so adamant about this topic would really help this prologue!

Also, I got a vague idea of what kind of a pair Teddy/Victorie are thogh I feel like just by adding a few scenes, maybe flashbacks or something, readers could really feel their relationship a bit more clearly since that would make the story pop out more.

Also I noticed a grammatical error, " since I three.." I think you meant "since you were three"

Overall this was a great start! Can't wait to see where you are going with this =) Good job!

Sorry if this review seemed to harsh :P

-Mya

Author's Response: It's so strange to hear someone refer to me by my actual name on here.

I don't know why but I seem to be hopping onto the Teddy/Victoire bandwagon (prepare yourselves for the obsession people). I'll see if I can add any more detail about that part in there.

Sorry, I haven't had access to a computer for the pass week or two so my writing isn't at it's best at the moment. I'll definitely be taking a closer look at the chapter and try and make it better. This wasn't a harsh review at all and it was really helpful, thank you for the feedback!


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