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Review:FallenTruths says:
Hi Jami,

A horror/dark story questioning Bellatrix's sanity? This story is definitely right up my alley. I commend you for writing this in second person because that's certainly something that's difficult to master. I think it will really work well in this story though since you seem to be focusing mostly on the mental state of Bellatrix.

I love how creepy and sinister this whole prologue was. I really felt like you were able to delve into Bellatrix's mind and find out just what makes her strive for the power she gets from hurting others. The plot that you're working with sounds really interesting as well. Bellatrix's sanity is definitely questionable, and it will be great to examine that topic further.

One of my favorite lines was, "Only by seizing the human heart and forcing it silent can you capture from them what was never rightfully theirs." It's a rather simplistic event you were describing, a murder, and yet the words you used to describe it were so artfully put together and really made the reader think about what it meant for that person to die.

I'm really curious to see where you're going with this story!

Alli

Author's Response: Alli! Is anyone sanity more fun to question than Bellatrix's? If so, I can't think of who on earth it would be :P. I had a lot of fun starting this off in second person PoV and that's something that will come back, though the whole story won't be told using that. That would just be way too much for me, haha.

Eek I'm so happy you felt like the prologue was creepy and sinister! I really wanted to set the mood for the story that's going to unfold so I hope that did the trick.

Thank you so much for your very sweet review, Alli ♥ I'm really excited you liked how this started out and hope future chapters don't disappoint you!



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