Kayla has finished her exams.
Meaning she is able to FINALLY review all your new stuff! :D
Kayla quite enjoyed this one-shot, even though it was angsty. But Kayla enjoys a little angst. Kayla also believes that your characterisations were very well done and you succeeded in making Kayla both annoyed at and feeling sorry for Victoire.
Kayla has one tiny bit of criticism, however. You have used the word "sweats but in England, Kayla has been told that they call them "track pants" or for short, "trackies".
Other than that tiny tidbit, Kayla has no other criticism. She thinks that this is a wonderful one-shot and even though she's only read a little bit of your works she can see a massive improvement! :D
Also, Kayla likes this song very much and the plot fit very well into it. Kayla applauds you for this.
Kayla awards a 10/10.
Author's Response: EEK! Kayla's finished with exams! Hurrah! :D
*gives lovely Kayla a round of applause*
I'm glad you liked this one-shot, despite it being angsty. I know how much of a cheerful, bubbly person you are, so I'm relieved that despite being this a bit emotionally-dramatic, you enjoyed it none-the-less.
Victoire. Ugh. I honestly don't know whether I like that girl or not. I think of a snobby, posh Fleur whenever I think of Vic, but I can't exactly judge her that way because she isn't really described in cannon, which sort of frustrates me at times. I honestly love Dominique, which is just as awful, seeing how she's even more of a mystery, but just hearing her name--it's not as snobby /Victoire/...
And thank you for pointing out my failure of use of English terms. I tired to keep it closely to English as possible. For example, I even looked up if "saltine crackers" existed in England. Good thing I did, because it doesn't, and apparently the closest thing to it is a cream cracker, which I used instead. Of course, I didn't go overboard with my researching, hence, why I didn't catch my "sweats" to "trackies" mistake. But thank you, I'll bear that in mind next time! :P
And yesh, the song. I was actually listening to Pandora Internet Radio when the song was playing, and I had it on repeat on youtube because I fell in love with it so much. I'm pleased to see that you thought the plot fitted it well.
Thank you so much for your review and reading this! I'm gonna go scamper off now and answer to your other reviews. I'm so sorry I hadn't had the time to get back to you on these reviews, but I'm here now, for a short while, that is, but I'm here.
Thankies again lovely!:D