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Review:ShadowRose says:
I saw this story a while ago and wanted to read it, and now I'm using Battleship as an excuse. :)

I love how you portray both Astoria and Draco in this. Draco, because you see that he's been a caring person all along, instead of only after the war. And Astoria, because even though she's been hurt so many times by her own father, she keeps coming back, like when she tried to help him escape, but then changed her mind. It really shows that she tried to connect with him.

Random fact: "Blown Away" just started playing on Pandora. How coincidental. :)

I love your descriptions in this. I can really picture everything that's going on, and all the emotion is just so... raw. It's so realistic and excellently done.

Also, I love how you had Astoria burn down the house, as the lyrics just said "there's not enough rain to wash the sins out," so instead of letting it rain, she burns the whole thing down.

Speaking of which, I love how you have the thunderstorms as a symbol throughout: at the beginning, when you're talking about Astoria's mother's death, and finally, at the end, when they've burnt the house down.

At first, I thought "lightening spit" was a mistake, but now I'm not so sure... It actually works really well in the story that way.

I was looking for something to CC on... I can't find anything.

This was beautiful and fits the song absolutely perfectly!


Author's Response: Hi Taylor!! This story is one of the first darker ones I've tried and am still pretty proud of it, so I'm extra happy you chose it to read!

I always use Draco and Astoria for me more... interesting stories that no one else would really fit in. Hahaah. I did love the idea of watching Astoria go through this, then getting into the Auror department for the purpose of bringing Mr. Greengrass down. I think I'll eventually write a longer story on these two, but not until Before They Fall and book two, Into the Darkness, are both complete.

Isn't Blown Away such an amazing song??? I'm so happy that it just came on pandora! I listened to it every second while writing this, haha.

Yes!!! That's exactly what I wanted with burning it down!!! The rains won't wash away it all, so instead she just burns down the damn house. Go Astoria!!

Hehhe I've had a couple people mention 'Lightening spit' and honestly, I can't remember if it was supposed to be that or split now. But I think I like spit better :P!

Aww thank you for all your sweet compliments ♥ I'm really happy you enjoyed this!

Also, I love your penname. I remember thinking that the first time I saw you on the forums, and always have forgotten to tell you, haha!

♥ Jami

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