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Review:DancingMooncalf says:
Wow, this story is already gripping me.
You chose the most thrilling piece of the story for your prologue I guess. And well chosen. It's very well written and get me excited for the story.

In this prologue you show more then just a start of the story, with the memories of your main character you set something in motion. With what I just read I immidiately start thinking. In most stories there is this very strikt black and white, good and bad distinction. Here I already feel that you're going to make it less easy to distinct good from bad.

I like how this story sucked me right in. I did not have to try to read on, I did not have 'sit through' a long discribtion of things that happened in the past, not I you got sucked in and now I kind of have to read the rest, just to know what is going in this piece!

It's very well done and your writing is great. I would just make the gaps between two sentenses a little smaller. I don't like scrolling all that much.
That's really the only tip I have for you. Because I like the flow, and the little bits and pieces I caught from the characters.

Feel free to request for you next chapter if you want that.

Maya

Author's Response: Hi!! I'm glad that the prologue has thus far drawn you in, it's very good to hear as that's exactly the reaction I was hoping for!! It's also great to hear that the distinctions between good and evil and how they are unclear and overlap is coming across and setting up the story well.

I'd love to hear what you think of the next chapter, as it is very different and occurs much, much earlier before the prologue, and I'd love to know how you thought the transition works.

Thank you so much for your lovely review!!! :)


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