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Review:Alopex says:
This was a really touching story for me. Neville has always been one of my favorite characters. Your story actually reminded me a little of one of mine, though not because the plots were similar at all. Just because they are both stories related to death that feature Hannah.

Anyway. I think that was a good choice, choosing to have Hannah be the narrator. That allowed you to focus on her reactions and the children as well, without having to go into a lot of detail regarding how Neville was dealing with it all. I imagine it might be a somewhat complex time for him, and showing that through Hannah's eyes meant you didn't have to focus on it to make the story seem truly believable, if that makes sense.

The story overall was quite touching. It was well written and flowed well. More importantly, I believe you managed to make intense emotions come alive on the page without resorting to sentimentality. That can be a difficult feat to achieve.

Well done. I'm impressed.

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :)

Yeah, I don't really know why I chose Hannah to be the narrator to be honest, but it just seemed like it fit really well. I knew she would have been very upset if Neville's parents died, but I think your absolutely right about Neville being more upset and really only being able to focus on that. I think you got why I wrote Hannah narrating this better than I did :P

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm really happy you liked it :)

-Amanda


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