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Review:nott theodore says:
So, I've been reading and reviewing this story (albeit quite slowly, but I've been quite busy) and I really am enjoying it. It's different to most of the other stories I've read before on here and seems really original.

I'd been wondering whether Hogwarts had been founded yet or not, because it hadn't really been mentioned in the previous chapters, so it's good to know that it has. And I really like the way you describe the origins of Hogwarts and the fact that it began as quite a small establishment. Before now, I've always thought of Hogwarts as just springing into being, and this chapter gave a much more realistic take on how it happened.

I really love the changes in point of view in each chapter (I know they remain in third person but I can't think of any other way to describe it) and the way they give us a better insight into what each character is thinking. I really enjoyed this first encounter between them and the fact that although both of them found the other physically attractive, they didn't instantly fall for the other's personality. It makes the story seem much more believable, since we know that ultimately they didn't have a happy ending.

And I really just love this line: "A warm spring breeze guided the fading sun down toward its grave, the horizon that would grant it slumber." It's such a perfect sentence, I genuinely had to read it a few times because of how brilliant it is!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: I'm happy to hear you like the way I conceptualized the beginning of Hogwarts. It was fun to imagine the school in its first days. I sort of thought it would be like Plato's school in Ancient Greece, with small classes and informal sharing of knowledge, and then it would grow as more people heard of it and wanted to try to educate their children there. I also thought the admission policies might grow to be more welcoming over time, which turns out to be a big theme in this story.

Thanks. That's kind of become part of my style, trying to take things from different characters' point of view but still sticking to the same overall narrative. It's good to hear that you find it realistic for Venn and Helena to find some qualms with each other and to feel uncertain about the prospect of marrying.

Oh, and it's great that you liked the imagery! That last scene with Helena standing hopefully on her doorstep in the evening light was one of my favorite parts of writing this chapter.

Thanks for yet another wonderful review :)


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