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Review:teh tarik says:
I have this theory why Edie didn't get to tell Blakeslee after all, and it's because you want your readers gnashing their teeth in frustration for Edie and in fury for Rose and because TEH BAD THINGS must go on for Edie. And before us readers can vent all our frustrations on you, you go and bring Oliver Wood in. And then gah it almost makes up for Edie not having that conversation with Blakeslee. Mmmmphhhmfff. Anyway.

OMG the Farting Charm really killed me. I suppose Rosie deserved it :P What really kills me is Rose running away and with each step her hoity-toity high heels emit some terrific farts. smmmasjfk;l AND BEACH QUIDDITCH. What is that. Is that played by women in bikinis? WOMEN IN BIKINIS ON BROOMSTICKS.

Am so glad you brought in a bit of Edie's family life to the story. Although it's a chaotic bit of family life in the form of Luke, Leo and Liam. I've never seen or heard of Edie's mothering side before so i was pleased to see new things about her. I wonder if the brothers will feature in later chapters, otherwise this visit would be a bit of a random unconnected event. I suppose that's normal, though.

And that's the smack that Edie bestows on Oliver. I know you were posting on the forums asking if such a matter could be taken seriously, and I'm pleased to see that you wrote it really well here. It wasn't melodramatic or farcical and so far from what I've read in later chapters, it does affect both Oliver and Edie a little, but not to dramatic extremes. So well done there :)

Anyway, whe. I'm off to reread and review the next chapter!


Author's Response: Hallo!! ♥

Edie's little trick gave me a chuckle as well, particularly the part you mentioned. I really wish I could see that xD

And yes, you've got Beach Quidditch right ;D I was poking fun at the way women's sports are widely ignored or disregarded, unless it's beach volleyball or something similar. It was my feminist (passive?)aggression coming out... I'm channeling Edie for sure!

Her brothers will be reappearing, although it's not a major plot point. You're right, it is a bit disconnected! But I thought that Edie's home life is a really important part of her character (said Captain Obvious.) It felt even more random and disconnected to be like "oh I have brothers and I had to take care of them all my life and THAT'S why I'm so bossy and opinionated about other people's lifestyles," but then not get into showing it. Plus this chapter was just a lot of fun to write... ;3

I'm so flattered that you're actually RE-reading my stories! Gah! Thank you so much for another lovely and very thoughtful review :D

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