So sorry that I have taken FOREVER to come and review this. I had a major writer's block and once I knew where I wanted to go with the story, I just wrote before all inspiration went away. I'm here though! Ready to tackle this! :D
I felt so bad for Simon and everything he's experiencing. I'm sure it was like that and even 1000 times worse in a real concentration camp but I just wanted to save him!
What amazes me the most is how you seemed to have thought of everything. Like Xavier's need for a cane which is only a 'tool' to deceive others.
I spotted a typo:
with its decaying paint peeling of,--shouldn't it be 'off'?
Camille and Xavier need to stop this, ok? They belonged together! You definitely managed to get to my emotions here when it comes to those two. I rarely ship OC, nor care much for them but you definitely managed to get me riled up with their memory of Le Havre. Your choice of words and description are fantastic and I think that's why I got attached to the two of them and why I think they need to stop this and get back together!
However, will we get to see what happened between the two of them?
Jean is very...umm...intense. Why did he try to stab his uncle?
Anyway! This was a fantastic second chapter and I can't wait to see the next one so I hope you get to update soon!
Thanks for letting me read this and so sorry for taking forever!
Until next time
Author's Response: Before anything, I must tell your comment about shipping Xavier and Camille made my entire week. Even now, as I respond to this centuries later, I smile like an idiot when I read that. &hearts
If you want to save Simon, then I'm managing what I'm aiming at! He's such an intense character to write, and I'm really tempted to just magically whisk him out, but then this little voice speaks up and tells me that that's not how things went, that people suffered of cold, hunger, discrimination and torture; were deported and that most of them died. Out of respect for all of those people, I have to leave Simon in the camps for now, simply because it wouldn't feel right saving him when so many others weren't (even though it breaks my heart writing his scenes, trust me).
Whoops, that turned into a bit of an essay.
I think you pointing out the cane makes me love you even more right now. Originally, I just had the scene without the cane, then when I reread, again, the little voice came back, and I thought 'Wait. Xavier shouldn't be in Caen, he's an adult male, so he should be away in Germany working in a Nazi factory. Cane it is'.
Thank you for pointing out the typo, I've resubmitted the edited chapter!
I've said what I had to say about your compliments on that scene, so I will stop before I go off on a tangent again. THANK YOU SO MUCH &hearts
Yes, we do get to see, though not just yet!
Jean, whom I originally really liked, is turning out to be dsturbingly creepy. He has a chapter dedicated to him in two or three chapters (I think), where some background info is given, and it includes the causes for his hate of his uncle.
Thank you so much for your review Rosie, it gave me the kick I needed to proofread chapter 3, which is currently sitting in the queue waiting to be validated -- it should be up give or take two or three day!
Again, thank you so much!