Arrrgh, so sad!!
So, so sad!!
You've broken George, or maybe he was broken and you just SHOWED me how broken he was... And now I'm really sad. I probably need to go read a Dramione parody to cheer up. (Just kidding... I don't even like that ship!)
The grimbly-whatever was a really clever invention on your part, and as sad as it makes me to admit it, yes, I can see the Weasley twins doing drugs. As much as I'd like them to just be that crazy on their own... But having George take it and then use Polyjuice to turn into Fred was quite brilliant and heartbreaking, indeed.
I'll be honest, when he said that he was going to turn into Fred, I thought, "What's the difference?" I forgot that George had only one ear! When he got up onstage at the funeral... That was just even more sadness that I didn't like, but loved at the same time.
Because really, with your writing, even though you've put all of your syntax into a blender on purpose for this story, you've got me seeing EVERYTHING that goes on. I feel as if I'm right there with George, and that's what makes it all so sad. :(
The only part that made me laugh a little (not that this is SUPPOSED to be a humor story...) was when he wrote, "jokes on you mate" on the tombstone. But it actually wasn't funny at all. It's the kind of humor that funny people use as a defense mechanism when they're sad. And it's more pathetic than anything. (Here, "pathetic" means "arousing sympathy in others." Just thought I'd clarify!)
But yes, despite the extreme sadness of this whole chapter, thank you for breaking George. There are not a lot of people who write him immediately after Fred's death, but it's such an important thing for people to see. I mean, it's not like he just magically started being George again without Fred by his side. And after reading this, I believe he might never again be the George he once was.
Amazing, amazing, heartbreaking chapter!
Author's Response: Hello Unlucky ♥
...your reviews are such an ego booster :P If you give me any more praise I'm going to burst :P
Thank you so much for this! I'm so glad you didn't find the short sentences and stuff like that disruptive to reading, and that you followed George's emotional state through this. I was constantly on the edge of my seat writing this, hoping it wouldn't be too overdramatic or unrealistic or plain silly. But so far the feedback I've got for this chapter has just been amazing. It really made me uncomfortable, writing George this way :(
And...it's totally OK to laugh at some parts (...in fact I'm secretly hoping people /will/ laugh baha). It's meant to be an impossibly ridiculous but tragic chapter. And yes, 'pathetic' is such an excellent word to describe all this mess!
And I don't know if George will recover. I mean JKR herself said he was never the same, sort of.
Thank you so so so much for your absolutely lovely review ♥ It's just made my day, week, year, forever, forever and a day.gah ♥ ♥ ♥