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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
Aw poor Albus! I feel so bad for him! He feels so alone and thinks that nobody could possibly love him. I do wonder what happend that caused this whole thing between him, Fred, and Fred's girl. It sounds like she used to be Albus' so some how she ended up ditching him or Al ditching her so that she could be with Fred.

It's got to be hard to think that everyone has sided with Fred including the rest of their family, but I can imagine that in a huge family having two people like the same person could happen. I think that you have a very interesting and original idea going here. I like that life isn't looking so great for Albus right now and he is dealing with real life issues and not just everything is wonderful for him and his family since Voldemort is gone. I love the inclusion of Hannah in this, its just nice to see other minor characters being thrown in and mentioned!

I also like the relationship between the siblings. It seems like Lily and Albus are pretty close and that James really does try to help Albus but either his advice is a bit off or Albus doesn't want to be taking advice from his older brother. I'm excited to see more about the family dynamic. So far you have it so that Albus says that everyone has taken Freds side but I haven't really seen that so much. I mean I could catch a bit from Harry talking with Fred and can see how Al would feel betrayed that way. Great Job! I very much enjoyed this chapter and can't wait to see where it goes next and just how being back at Hogwarts will treat Al.

this is my 1000th review!

Author's Response: Yep poor Albus, he just really needs a hug, if he liked anyone coming near him that is. But he does feel really alone, and it's mainly Leanne's fault sadly.
And yes you're right she did used to be Albus's girlfriend, but she left him, which you'll see soon enough.

The family are only seeming to side with Fred because not all of them know that Freds Leanne was Albus's Leanne. Albus is a very secretive person and doesn't like letting other people know things about him, he finds it hard to open up, so not even his family had ever met Leanne when she was going out with Albus.

Thank you for saying that my idea is original and interesting. I wanted to show that it's not always good having such a big family and that they're not all happy and cheery all the time.

Albus and James have a bit of a strained relationship, James tries to help but Albus doesn't want to listen to him. Whereas he would do anything for Lily, she's his favourite family member.

Albus sadly only see's them talking to her and he immediately assumes that they're taking Fred's side, but he hasn't told them why he's hating Fred at the moment and the situation, so sadly that's kinda his fault.

Thank you so much for your amazing review! I'm hoping to write the next chapter soon.

Oh wow! Congratulations on your 1000th review! I'm so honoured that it's on my story :D

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