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Review:DarknessIsMyOnlyFriend says:
I still wonder, would Dominique have been able to simply hide out in the cabin? Or would that not have been an option? Not sure if I asked that in the previous reviews :P.

I'm going to say again, however, that I really like that you've made this about werewolves. I know J.K. Rowling once said something about Hermione fighting for their rights. However, we all know by looking at the history of the world that changing laws won't necessarily change the people. So I like to see your view on this subject in the future of Harry Potter. And no matter how supportive your loved ones are, it might just not be enough. You portrayed that well in Dominique's thoughts.

But I am sure it would hurt Teddy's feelings that Dominique thinks you can only be a monster once the virus infects you. After all everybody always ensured him his father was amazing and it's not like he can decide for himself.

And I actually like that you did no make it a big deal between Dominique and Victoire. I thought it would only make sense it would ensue drama, but I kinda like how you went about it.

And her boss, what a piece of work isn't she. 'Yes it's horrible what happened to you, but let's look at all the gain there is for me.' Haha I like it. A story always needs a somewhat unsympathetic person.

And I like Teddy. The way you describe him, makes me think of his father. So gentle and caring. And never losing his temper.

One typo I noticed: She giggled before planting a chaste kiss on her lips. I'm guessing her should be him.

I really like the pace of this story. You don't rush it, but enough happens. And the writing style, makes it flow so easily. Really, it reads quite effortlessly. I'm quite curious about what will happen next. What will Teddy say, do or think...
Another good chapter I'd say!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, and sorry for the late response.

I think Dominique wouldn't have been able to simply hide out in the cabin. The werewolf might just come barging in ;) And well she wasn't aware that a werewolf would be right outside her door so she assumed it was safe to 'run out'.

Yes it's true. I have seen this about a lot of things - changing laws doesn't change people and people's views. I am pleased you found all this portrayed well in Dom's thoughts.

Well, Teddy is very mature and sensible, so he won't let Dominique's words affect him greatly =)

I wanted to show a simple loving relationship between Victoire and Dominique, that they are sisters and a guy won't come in between them, so yeah.

Haha the boss is weird yes. Unsympathetic is exactly the right word for her!

Yes, as I said, Teddy is very calm, mature and sensible. Growing up without his parents, and with Harry in charge of him, and having Remus for a father, I think he'd have turned out that way.

Ooh thanks for pointing out that typo. I'll edit it out!

I was worried that the pace of the story is a little slow, but your comment has me relieved. I am so happy you like my writing style as well. The next chapter is in the queue.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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