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Review:DarknessIsMyOnlyFriend says:
I like how you alternate the chapters. And you are accurate, including the dates and everything. It's a nice touch! And the fact you have a few mental questions italicised, making it similar to the first chapter. I think it's always nice to see such consistencies in stories.

I love how you portrayed Hermione's thoughts. You stay so incredibly close to how J.K. Rowling wrote her, even though the books never really shared the thoughts of Hermione. It's also very realistic for Hermione to think about blaming harry, even if only for a split second, or how the recent events taint her beautiful memories of the forest. They're cold and tired, it's only normal. It's always nice to read about Hermione's feelings, because she so often has to be rational and strong, it's easy to forget she is just as human and compassionate and loving as the boys. If not more so.
She seems so depressed and yet she keeps going. That's how I always imagined her in the books as well. She could be kicked to ground, but she would not stay down.

I really like this chapter, as I did the previous chapter. It's so descriptive and realistic. It's really good. Sorry it took me a few days to get to this, but I'm glad I did read these :D

Author's Response: Hi again!

I'm glad you felt like there was stylistic consistency between this chapter and the previous one. I didn't mean for them to have the exact same word count, but I did try to carry over the formatting. This was originally written for a challenge that was to show two different sides of an emotion or reaction, which is part of why there are parallels.

I really wanted to give Hermione a chance to show weakness in this story; as you said, she always has to be so strong and put her feelings aside for the sake of pushing forward. I'm sure it really took a toll on her out in the forest, when she finally had a chance to think. Like you mentioned, though, she's not the kind of person to actually give up in the end.

Thanks for another fabulous review! (By the way, I really appreciate you reading both!)

-Amanda


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