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Review:patronus_charm says:

I really liked how you started, it was just so typical of Hermione to be going around and attempting to change the statute of secrecy. I really liked seeing this revolutionary Hermione, and it just showed how much she had risen in the wizarding world, as she had managed to create the change SPEW was campaigning, and now to tackle something so much bigger.

We so rarely get to see the younger generation of Weasleys interacting with the older ones, so it was such a pleasure to see Hermione and Albus here. I love Albus too, he just seemed so likeable, and not the usual portrayal we see of him. I really liked that he and Hermione seemed to get one well, and it made my heart warm.

The suspense you built up about what was going on was great too. The parcel seemed rather inconspicuous at first, and then it gradually dawned on the reader and Hermione that something was not completely right. I did feel a little sorry for Albus being out of the loop for a while, but it was interesting that Hermione trusted him enough to tell him straight away. I guess itís because heís and adult, and sheís knows what itís like not knowing whatís exactly going on.

Her reaction to Greyback was great, and so realistic. You could sense her almost wanting to let him be free, as she supports people getting a second chance. Then there was that sense of whether he would be safe if he was allowed out, or whether it would lead to more victims. I so rarely hear about Death Eaters in stories after Hogwarts, and I thought it was really interesting to hear about them a considerable time late.

I thought this was an excellent chapter, and it showed a really interesting perspective of post-war Britain, and how Hermione still canít escape the past.

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hi, Kiana!

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. This story started as a strange little inspiration that came to me while I was writing Conspiracy of Blood. I jotted down a bunch of ideas and set it aside, then came back to it a couple of months after CoB was finished.

I'm glad that I was able to make Hermione feel familiar to you. A big part of selling this, I thought, was giving the reader a Hermione that they could relate to. Similar to the Hermione from the books, but older, wiser and more experienced. That said, she still has a bit of an impulsive streak.

I really wish I could find more stories where the canon and Next Gen characters participate equally in the plot. Canon characters are usually glossed over in Next Gen stories and when Next Gen characters appear in stories focused on the canon characters, they're usually small children. I really loved the idea of Albus as his aunt's protege. A smart, young, up-and-coming attorney who shares her passion for social justice.

If you get around to reading the second chapter, don't forget about the parcel. There's an interesting story behind it.

I'm glad that the situation with Greyback seemed morally ambiguous. That's exactly what I was shooting for.

I hope I can lure you back for chapter 2 at some point. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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