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Review:nott theodore says:

Lucy's a very dramatic character, isn't she? There doesn't seem to be anything that happens in her life that isn't full of crazy emotion and wild reactions!

I have to say, I didn't expect that ending! When I read the summary I realised that there was going to be something strange about her parents, but I didn't realise that was what it would be! Since this is a novel, I didn't expect something this big to be revealed so early, but it definitely does shock the reader!

This definitely does explain why Lucy has always felt like (and been treated like, it seems) the outsider in the family - because she's not actually related to any of them. You left us with lots to be curious about in this chapter, like whether Rose really is pregnant, and what's going to happen now that Lucy has found out the truth about her parents.

I like Dom. She seems like a bit of a no-nonsense character. Definitely someone that Lucy needs on her side! I'm a bit confused where Teddy popped up from, though.

I did notice a few grammatical errors in this chapter (some are probably just typos, like a full stop in the middle of the sentence) but if you went back and edited them it would make it easier to read.

I'm looking forward to see how you develop this story and what's going to happen next!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Thanks, I decided to add Teddy in because he is going to be in the main plot. That is not the end of the story, there is a twist in the plot. I'm going to edit over my chapters, and improve them and make them longer. Thanks for another great review
~Macy x

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