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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hahahahahahahahahahahahaha!

The very first thing I was going to comment on, funnily enough, was the "mouths taste like mouths" thing. I read that, and I was like TRU!! (Yeah, I know... I'm strange.) But really, incorporated into the story like that... So funny!! :)

The next thing? Ariana's love of birds. I like birds myself--in fact, I like to make fake bird hair clips and wear them IN PUBLIC--so I can sympathize with her love of birds. But even I think that finch manicures are just too cruel... Do Peony's finches even love her? She seems to put them through so much... Well-meaning torture?

But I do appreciate the fact that she shielded her bird's eyes when she caught Roderick and Pansy. Birds must not be robbed of their innocence and awesomeness by some illicit romance!!

Ginny and Luna's interaction with Peony was priceless. It's like, rational meets irrational and BANG, weirdness ensues. Especially when they discussed kissing!

Terrence! Where has he gone?! Mary Sue stories hurt my eyes (except for this one, of course!), so I don't read them as a general rule. But I guess plots and subplots have a way of disappearing in the (real) Mary Sue stories?

In any case, I'm quite glad that you mentioned his cookies. I hope to see him in later chapters!!

Another wildly-silly-while-at-the-same-time-being-kind-of-plot-driven chapter! Huzzah!

And also, it made me laugh when I read that you have a few betas helping you out, because it's like they've seen so much Mary Sue that they could write better Mary Sue than all the Mary Sue-ers do!! It must have been quite a hilarious project! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response:
I knew the moment that I read that blog that those words had to go into a story somewhere. Sometimes the truth is funny. :)

I like birds to, you know? Not as much as Peony does, obviously, but I have clipped parakeet toes a bunch of times. It's tedious and the birds don't like it much. Yet, it's necessary.

I loved writing about the kissing. It just had to be that way. And don't fret about Terrence. He's still in the story, I promise. Him and his cookies. :)

My betas were extremely helpful with this story. It was quite the hilarious project! And I do have to credit them a lot. I couldn't have come up with all of these scenarios all by myself.

Thanks for another review!



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